The story has potential, but the spelling, grammar, and technical details were horrendous and ought to be checked before publishing.anonymous readerReport 2011-05-12 10:28:23IJWTS wow! xnx drag it out more. drag it out more. to the author i would advise reading over what you write and making sure it sounds right and try to add more to the sex… drag it out more. Add more details or have coach get some treatment for premature ejaculation.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-15 01:35:22{adding…} “read it over” with a fine-toothed spell-checker, as well as a good grammar-checker. 5 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2011-05-22 02:21:36Wow, some of the more painful writing I’ve muddled through. but i get what you mean… it has potential«1» it has potential«1» {intentional words} I joust love when the word is spelled write, butt utterly the rung won to use their.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-14 23:07:37kinda harsh Ghostrider939…
