but you can write well, hope to see more stories by you in the future.cheeky49Report 2009-10-20 16:49:14what a load of crap«12» 7 comments«12»ReaderReport 2009-12-06 11:10:10:O paragraphs pleaseeee otherwise I’d get angry o.eAnonymous readerReport 2009-11-27 23:40:03that was hot i came right thereAnonymous readerReport 2009-10-23 04:11:54no it was good but just felt rushed like u wrote it in a rush is allAnonymous readerReport 2009-10-22 09:46:28well i loved it, but you should work on your structuring. Xxx 7 comments«12»ReaderReport 2009-12-06 11:10:10:O paragraphs pleaseeee otherwise I’d get angry o.eAnonymous readerReport 2009-11-27 23:40:03that was hot i came right thereAnonymous readerReport 2009-10-23 04:11:54no it was good but just felt rushed like u wrote it in a rush is allAnonymous readerReport 2009-10-22 09:46:28well i loved it, but you should work on your structuring. there wasn’t a single paragraph in the entire story. but you can write well, hope to see more stories by you in the future.cheeky49Report 2009-10-20 16:49:14what a load of crap«12»
