4 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-14 21:05:49good job, better with drawing out the scenes. you get caught up in the moment then hurry to get it over with… Xxnx Slow down and don’t worry if you don’t two of the main characters in the same part, unless they are in the scene.Anonymous readerReport 2008-11-22 03:55:11still need to slow it down a bit… very goo though i like it :)READERReport 2008-01-03 16:52:27ok since no one liked parts 3-5 i will allow you to tell me what to add on to part 2 i will make a new part 3 based on your ideasREADERReport 2007-12-25 20:43:33The transitions are still not making any sense. Slow down and don’t worry if you don’t two of the main characters in the same part, unless they are in the scene.Anonymous readerReport 2008-11-22 03:55:11still need to slow it down a bit…
