8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-07-31 11:14:58no paragraphs and you started in the middle of the story this shoould have been chapter two out of three delete and rewrite and use a good editor from now onanonymous readerReport 2011-04-20 20:54:58EVER HEARD OF PARAGRAPHS ? Xxx She kept a robe by the back door for when she had to hang clothes on the line in their back yard. Hard to imagine the son and daughter having enough energy after all the sex activity, to play sports of any kind. Why would they leave??? Hard to imagine the son and daughter having enough energy after all the sex activity, to play sports of any kind. Will the daughter and son stay with mom or will they eventually leave her???? gave it a 9/10.READERReport 2007-05-15 10:57:05I’m not to keen on this, it’s so unlikely to happen.3/10 you must try harder!«12»
