Need more it look more incomplete then complete.READERReport 2005-08-01 02:45:43Thats was WAY to short darling, your first effort was amazing. Don’t stop though.«12» 8 comments«12»READERReport 2008-01-28 14:40:04Your writing a third one right?READERReport 2006-12-30 18:28:09i have 2 admit compared 2 the last one lhat was absolutly shitREADERReport 2005-12-26 01:09:46good i guess next time have pepper spray in ur purse or maybe a pocket knife lol and kick ur brothers ass tell your parents they wil do something (cops). Xxnx . . …READERReport 2005-10-31 20:07:52Positive comment
Has a great start i guess. Constructive feed backs
More detail about the charcters. Don’t stop though.«12» 8 comments«12»READERReport 2008-01-28 14:40:04Your writing a third one right?READERReport 2006-12-30 18:28:09i have 2 admit compared 2 the last one lhat was absolutly shitREADERReport 2005-12-26 01:09:46good i guess next time have pepper spray in ur purse or maybe a pocket knife lol and kick ur brothers ass tell your parents they wil do something (cops). . . …READERReport 2005-10-31 20:07:52Positive comment
Has a great
