Work on that and other technical details, and you’ll do well. Xnxx.com 9 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-03 10:39:03Poor story with no plot or characterisationmtnguy70Report 2011-02-17 02:20:23Nice story, but too many commas, and they weren’t usually in the correct places. 9 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-03 10:39:03Poor story with no plot or characterisationmtnguy70Report 2011-02-17 02:20:23Nice story, but too many commas, and they weren’t usually in the correct places. :)Anonymous readerReport 2009-07-13 22:35:08you got a good base for a story, now u just need more detail and for it to be much longer! U need to put more detailAnonymous readerReport 2009-01-14 21:06:20There is no god damn pop in a guy! Actually have sex before you write a story!«12» Thanks for enough imaginative input to get me hard though! 9 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-03 10:39:03Poor story with no plot or characterisationmtnguy70Report 2011-02-17 02:20:23Nice story, but too many commas, and they weren’t usually in the correct places.
