a simple story line whould have worked much better. Xnxx.com good effert 9/10wordytomReport 2008-10-26 17:15:47Too gimicky. WordytomvtsReport 2008-10-26 06:29:19great story, more please«1» I apologize if I insult you, but I feel you have potential. i was definatly captured all the way to the end. WordytomvtsReport 2008-10-26 06:29:19great story, more please«1» If yours was crap I would have moved on and not bothered. 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! a simple story line whould have worked much better. I also agree with wordytom… Right now you are trying to be clever. 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! Don’t be clever until you first become a writer. 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! Right now you are trying to be clever. Right now you are trying to be clever. I apologize if I insult you, but I feel you have potential. i was definatly captured all the way to the end. Why not try to tell a
