Detail matters. Xnxx.com With not much detail. Also, think about continuity and having even a fantasy make sense.Anonymous readerReport 2010-06-25 21:42:31Pretty great story. 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2010-09-06 11:10:21It would have been an alright story line if u knew how to write properly. A spell check run would have caught many errors. Detail matters. You should definitely make a part two. It felt like you were just listing everything that happened. It was a little short & didn’t have much detail but all around a great story. Detail matters. It felt like you were just listing everything that happened. Def would have hurt you.Anonymous readerReport 2010-06-26 06:07:11Please proof your story. But still like I said, a great story 10/10«1» It was a little short & didn’t have much detail but all around a great story. And I agree with the other comment about being a virgin thing.
