You should have described his home where they were. The getting and expanded emotions pule me closer to the charactors. xnx You just kinda rushed the whole begining. This is a Great beginning to a series. 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-10-01 03:42:15When you prepare version 3 do you think you could put in the necessary capital letters and punctuation?anonymous readerReport 2012-09-30 22:10:46it was really good until you introduced the demon. You should have described his home where they were. 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-10-01 03:42:15When you prepare version 3 do you think you could put in the necessary capital letters and punctuation?anonymous readerReport 2012-09-30 22:10:46it was really good until you introduced the demon. You just kinda rushed the whole begining. Thanks«1» You just kinda rushed the whole begining.
