Maybe try typing story into microsoft word then compy and paste.Anonymous readerReport 2009-12-04 01:46:48poorly written, and completely unbelievable. i know im a rough critic. Xnxx.com What did the dress look like? but as much as id hate to admit it. 9 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-04 02:12:03Other than such comments mentioned I think you need to work on character design, ok we get it the girl is goth and she is wearing a nice dress, what does she look like? 9 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-04 02:12:03Other than such comments mentioned I think you need to work on character design, ok we get it the girl is goth and she is wearing a nice dress, what does she look like? love rape and bestialityAnonymous readerReport 2009-12-05 04:30:54good plot, but work on your formatting. passable. passable. it was perfect for a short little smut story. love rape and bestialityAnonymous readerReport 2009-12-05 04:30:54good plot, but work on
