See if it’s what you really want to say. Xxx Lastly, you used the word ‘endeavor’ out of context; it doesn’t fit your intention, so quit using words too big for yourself. You wouldn’t know a Redneck if one stepped up and kicked you in the ass idjit(sic)!!!!! There should be a very noticeable difference. It’s also a cliff hanger which I personally don’t like. That’s called irony. There should be a very noticeable difference. It’s the grammar that’s bad. The story line is not bad. Better proof reading would greatly enhance this story. Secondly, you used a comma where a semicolon belongs, and then didn’t add commas where they were needed. Now see there, I done learnt ya sumpin’ today.«123»
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Baby Cakes / Jon Q.
