5 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-05-22 22:09:37I loved it! Maybe if you made it into a chapter story it’d be better, and not so hurried. Xnxx Maybe if you made it into a chapter story it’d be better, and not so hurried. Also, I hate to be a grammar nazi, but the continuous flow, instead of proper paragraphs with the dialogue make it difficult to read. Maybe if you made it into a chapter story it’d be better, and not so hurried. The ending seems rather abrupt. The ending seems rather abrupt. So great! Also, I hate to be a grammar nazi, but the continuous flow, instead of proper paragraphs with the dialogue make it difficult to read. The flow could use work and it could have been lnger though.anonymous readerReport 2012-02-02 01:13:17I liked it, though I’d think better of it if it were longer.
