Also sex scenes need to be expanded and have more detail, describe it more, say what there bodies look like, how the’re feeling that sort of thing, The thing with her friend was kind of strange. Really, you’re complaining about the spelling and grammar of a comment that you obviously had no trouble reading. Xnxx.com I’m not talking about one little mistake here, for the amount of text the errors were quite prolific.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-10 17:39:21hard to follow so i read a few bits twice but in the end it was goodanonymous readerReport 2013-05-10 17:32:30Okay, so i normally don’t do this but i felt like doing it now. My advice is to rewrite this and proof read it to make sure it works well before posting it. Cya Later:)
Thel20anonymous readerReport 2013-05-10 10:58:11I’m not going to say it was bad but i will say that you really need to
