Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for the reader to follow a coherent story line or thought process. You obviously have a budding imagination but your writing skills leave much to be desired. xnx at the beginningAnonymous readerReport 2010-06-17 08:45:45Guys l know why. … Before you try again I recommend that you take some creative writing courses. Dude is MEXICANFbaileyReport 2010-06-16 23:42:35Great story keep it goingThe EditorReport 2010-06-16 19:01:33Sorry, but I couldn’t finish reading this “Supposed” story, it was just to difficult to read and understand. Dude is MEXICANFbaileyReport 2010-06-16 23:42:35Great story keep it goingThe EditorReport 2010-06-16 19:01:33Sorry, but I couldn’t finish reading this “Supposed” story, it was just to difficult to read and understand. Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for the reader to follow a coherent story line or thought process.
