U need to put more detailAnonymous readerReport 2009-01-14 21:06:20There is no god damn pop in a guy! U missed the plot. Xnxx.com U need to put more detailAnonymous readerReport 2009-01-14 21:06:20There is no god damn pop in a guy! :)Anonymous readerReport 2009-07-13 22:35:08you got a good base for a story, now u just need more detail and for it to be much longer! The people before me expressed my other thoughts. Thanks for enough imaginative input to get me hard though! Actually have sex before you write a story!«12» 9 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-03 10:39:03Poor story with no plot or characterisationmtnguy70Report 2011-02-17 02:20:23Nice story, but too many commas, and they weren’t usually in the correct places. :)Anonymous readerReport 2009-07-13 22:35:08you got a good base for a story, now u just need more detail and for it to be much longer! U need to put more detailAnonymous readerReport 2009-01-14 21:06:20There is no god damn pop
