Being more graphic would detract from the romance. Xxnx Good love making also involves a lot more foreplay than you described. My only grievance is that it ends too quickly. Story telling is a lot like love making. The more the foreplay, the more intense the climax.anonymous readerReport 2012-11-06 23:31:58it’s a good story with lots of romanceanonymous readerReport 2012-11-03 15:08:14I must disagree about being more graphic. I like how the story flowed in the beginning, but I felt it was a little rushed toward to end. ;)«12» Being more graphic would detract from the romance. 6 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2016-04-26 22:15:01A GOOD STORY YOU COULD HAVE GONE INTO MORE DEPTH IN THIER LOVE MAKING KEEP TRYINGthesilent1Report 2013-03-05 18:38:51Well, I had enjoyed reading your first shared story on here.
