Try and work on spacing text out, and paragraphs. Xxx Now as to the story: Concept Good but you need a proof reader and learn to use paragraphs and punctuation correctly.anonymous readerReport 2013-04-22 13:19:45YOU ARE A FUCKING ASSHOLE, and I hope you get captured and raped repeatedly since you seem to find it so entertaining. Try and work on spacing text out, and paragraphs. Now as to the story: Concept Good but you need a proof reader and learn to use paragraphs and punctuation correctly.anonymous readerReport 2013-04-22 13:19:45YOU ARE A FUCKING ASSHOLE, and I hope you get captured and raped repeatedly since you seem to find it so entertaining. your opening sentence was enough to ruin my mood and piss me off. your opening sentence was enough to ruin my mood and piss me off.
