The sentences were a little short and choppy but that added to the style, and it was highly entertaining. Great story. Xxx WGF- That’s exactly the problem I had on the forum and overcorrected for here. The sentences were a little short and choppy but that added to the style, and it was highly entertaining. Good writing, interesting plot, incest handled in a way that kept me reading,. I think I tried for too much when I tried to make the seperate thoughts read like dialogue in the first part. WGF- That’s exactly the problem I had on the forum and overcorrected for here. OHT- Thanks for the support, it’s always appreciated but I thought even the least tactful had something to say worth thinking about. The breaks with ID could help, maintain the rotation through the characters.
