Re-write it, keeping the narrative arc in mind, and then proof read it (out loud) to edit out the errors. Xxnx Don’t give up.«1» Don’t give up.«1» You’re trying to develop the characters, build suspense and garner enough interest for a sequel but you fail. Re-write it, keeping the narrative arc in mind, and then proof read it (out loud) to edit out the errors. Use a dictionary and a thesaurus to avoid homonyms, repetition of words/phrases and spelling errors. is that some sort of flatulence?anonymous readerReport 2012-03-31 10:00:02Too short for the style of story. Interesting premise, but you need to proof read and edit spelling and grammar as it is barely legible. 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-10-18 22:56:44I’m giggling at jiggling asses!YianoReport 2012-03-31 20:02:19I didn’t know asses could giggle… Don’t give up.«1» You’re trying to develop the characters, build suspense and garner enough interest for a sequel but you
