I understood that by the way you described Eric with the black spiky hair.anonymous readerReport 2012-08-04 17:21:52xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxanonymous readerReport 2012-08-04 17:21:51xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxanonymous readerReport 2012-04-27 00:30:52great story, please keep writing more«12» This is because there really is little to no description on the main character at all. xnx Again, I’m not trying to be a Bitch in any way, I’m just critiquing your work to try to make you a better writer.AnnistaysiaReport 2014-12-17 06:37:22So, this is the third in the series. The majority of us know what a basic house and school layout is like, so there you’re fine. However, I can’t stress this enough, character description is the difference between your “transgendered” boy or your “scrawny, frail” submissive boy. Again, description is a little better, grammar is still absolutely terrible, and I have no idea what the character, who I’m guessing is Ellen, looks like.
