Limit the use of adverbs as well. One last thought. Xxx Dump those damned exclamation marks! You are prone to flowery verse that reminds me of Early O’Henry at his worst. Limit the use of adverbs as well. Otherwise just use the period and say, “She was excited,” or show it with a description of your actions. Limit the use of adverbs as well. Nice critiques are insincere as a rule. You have a vivid imagination and a fine grasp of the English language. Instead I she give you my honest thoughts. Ponderous.wordytomReport 2008-10-01 18:56:11I am not going to be nice to you. Expand your skills and keep writing.DragonheartReport 2008-10-01 18:31:44″The cloudless sun beat down unmerciful on the somber gathered contingency”
“fresh dug plot”
“No no, he had no intention..”
“plowed her slit with gusto”
“strawberry tipped tits?
