I didn’t care about the paragraph breaks. Xxnx Writting must have comas, quotations, and paragraohs. Your writting is like someone talking without changing tones or expressions. Read the story yourself and I am sure you will understand what I and others are telling you. Writting must have comas, quotations, and paragraohs. Your writting is like someone talking without changing tones or expressions. I read it through all the way. This story was hot. Do you remember English class in school, grammar was a huge part and is needed to make your readers understand what you are trying to portray.It may take longer to write, but it makes a better story to read. I read it through all the way. 16 comments«1234»anonymous readerReport 2012-03-07 23:43:04paragraphs are a must for any storyanonymous readerReport 2012-03-07 16:56:41paragraphs are a must for any storyanonymous readerReport 2011-09-21 15:39:06Your story was good and the sex was
