Honestly, the story had a great start in this chapter, but for future chapters, proofreading before submitting keeps the flow of the story going.«1» Check your work better and try againAnonymous readerReport 2009-11-21 23:02:16Proofreading goes a long ass way to making a good story great. Honestly, the story had a great start in this chapter, but for future chapters, proofreading before submitting keeps the flow of the story going.«1» Check your work better and try againAnonymous readerReport 2009-11-21 23:02:16Proofreading goes a long ass way to making a good story great. Xxx 5 comments«1»Mark TwaynReport 2009-11-22 15:22:04It’s your best story for me. Great build up, but sex was too short.Anonymous readerReport 2009-11-22 11:03:08Good story idea, but the writing is, well, bad. Great build up, but sex was too short.Mark TwaynReport 2009-11-22 15:21:17It’s your best story for me. Check your work better and try againAnonymous readerReport 2009-11-21 23:02:16Proofreading goes a long ass way to
