keep tryingREADERReport 2006-05-27 19:49:50it wus like. …a 30 second read..waaaayyyy too shortREADERReport 2006-05-27 13:45:35It was fairly well written, but come on, only the very last part focused on the sex.«1» keep tryingREADERReport 2006-05-27 19:49:50it wus like. Xnxx …a 30 second read..waaaayyyy too shortREADERReport 2006-05-27 13:45:35It was fairly well written, but come on, only the very last part focused on the sex.«1» you need to flesh it out a little. The beginning was too long and the sex too short. Editing your writing more critically will help.READERReport 2006-05-28 00:54:20come on get on with itREADERReport 2006-05-27 22:41:15At no time did you ever let us know that Melissa even had a mom. 5 comments«1»READERReport 2006-05-28 22:30:49How was he unattractive exactly: he just wasn’t that good looking. Editing your writing more critically will help.READERReport 2006-05-28 00:54:20come on get on with itREADERReport 2006-05-27 22:41:15At no time did you ever let us know that Melissa even had a mom.
