But, witha bit more thought and proof reading, this good be a good story. Xxx Jumped around a little, your english is a bit off, but a good start.«1» But, witha bit more thought and proof reading, this good be a good story. Jumped around a little, your english is a bit off, but a good start.«1» 4 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2014-05-12 06:50:19English is not your first i guessAnonymous readerReport 2014-05-12 06:50:05English is not your first i guessanonymous readerReport 2011-12-17 09:24:42Way to short, not very good descriptions, and jumped around ALOT. But, witha bit more thought and proof reading, this good be a good story. But, witha bit more thought and proof reading, this good be a good story. Keep tryinganonymous readerReport 2011-12-15 08:12:23Not to bad.
